Comments on: Pronoun Confusion – Who’s Who Here? http://writeabetternovel.net/pronoun-confusion-whos-who-here/ Practical wisdom for novelists and other storytellers Fri, 03 Feb 2012 03:31:16 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Bill Henderson http://writeabetternovel.net/pronoun-confusion-whos-who-here/comment-page-1/#comment-2298 Bill Henderson Thu, 07 Oct 2010 17:45:41 +0000 http://truevoice-blog.com/?p=267#comment-2298 Okay, Jide, here goes: 1) "I'm too old to play with Leggos," young Michael told his granddad. 2) When Mary was eighteen, her mother remarried. 3) If your baby has trouble digesting cow's milk, serve it boiled. (Technically, it could still be the baby that's boiled, but this wording makes that possibility too remote to worry about.) 4) "You've had too much to drink," my father told his brother. Also: when you're having this kind of pronoun trouble, it's often a sign that, rather than struggle to reword the sentence, you need to pull back and rewrite the passage with new wording altogether. Okay, Jide, here goes:

1) “I’m too old to play with Leggos,” young Michael told his granddad.

2) When Mary was eighteen, her mother remarried.

3) If your baby has trouble digesting cow’s milk, serve it boiled. (Technically, it could still be the baby that’s boiled, but this wording makes that possibility too remote to worry about.)

4) “You’ve had too much to drink,” my father told his brother.

Also: when you’re having this kind of pronoun trouble, it’s often a sign that, rather than struggle to reword the sentence, you need to pull back and rewrite the passage with new wording altogether.

]]> By: Jide Ogunbo http://writeabetternovel.net/pronoun-confusion-whos-who-here/comment-page-1/#comment-2295 Jide Ogunbo Wed, 06 Oct 2010 08:30:14 +0000 http://truevoice-blog.com/?p=267#comment-2295 You are doing a great job; keep it up. I have some sentences that are confusing because of the placement of pronouns, can you help me rewrite them so as to bring out the intented meanings? Thank you 1) Young Michael told his granddad he was too old to play with Lego. 2) Mary's mother was remarried when she was eighteen. 3) If your baby has trouble digesting cow's milk, boil it. 4) My father told his brother that he'd had too much to drink. You are doing a great job; keep it up.
I have some sentences that are confusing because of the placement of pronouns, can you help me rewrite them so as to bring out the intented meanings? Thank you
1) Young Michael told his granddad he was too old to play with Lego.
2) Mary’s mother was remarried when she was eighteen.
3) If your baby has trouble digesting cow’s milk, boil it.
4) My father told his brother that he’d had too much to drink.

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